LUCID (Short Film)


#1

Hey guys! Here is a short film I made. Any notes would be appreciated so I can work on improving whatever those elements are next time! Enjoy!


#2

Hey there! Some nice effects in there both special and visual (nice bit of make up in that final shot). I thought the dog was well done, especially with what kind of footage you had. The shaky handheld cam, well I don’t like it.

Where I think you could gain something in this is lighting. In the close-ups of the guy I can often not see his eyes. A small light to the face could do wonders without looking too unnatural.

Good luck on the next one.


#3

Thank you! Yeah, the shakey footage was my main issue. I also low key forgot to turn off the built in warp stabilizer on my camera, which ironically, makes it appear more shakey :joy: And that’s a good point about the lighting. Will make sure to work on that next time. Thanks for the feedback!


#4

I like your tracking in the shots actually. The rainbow’s cartoon-y style was jarring at first but the cartoon-y dog after helped. Good things come in three for me, so I would’ve added one more cartoon-y thing. Even the police car could’ve been cartoon-y. It made me think about the character’s origins, a kid at heart. Great final shot too. It’s a good start man. I think the flaws include the light on the subject’s face, but also in that we don’t know much about him. Some kind of trinket would’ve been good, story-wise. Really show a clever quirk of your character’s that subverts the ending. For example, maybe the reason he’s imagining cartoony things is that the subject is revealed to both be dying and a child; something that changes the initial feel of an adult with a weird imagination walking in a trippy world. I don’t know, these are my two cents. Also, great title card at the end. Good luck man! I’ll definitely post my trailer for a short and ask what yall think too! :smiley:


#5

Thank you so much for the feedback! Will definitely keep these notes in mind for future videos